Please welcome back Tiffany Yates Martin to Writer Unboxed today! Tiffany has spent nearly thirty years as an editor in the publishing industry, working with major publishers and bestselling authors as well as newer writers. She’s led workshops and seminars for conferences and writers’ groups across the country and is a frequent contributor to writers’ sites and publications. She is the author of Intuitive Editing: A Creative and Practical Guide to Revising Your Writing. Visit her at www.foxprinteditorial.com.
How to Weave in Backstory without Stalling Out Your Story
Your characters don’t just spring to life at the beginning of your story. If you’ve developed them fully, they are “real,” three-dimensional people with complex backstories and experiences that have shaped who they are at your story’s “point A” and directly inform the journey they take in your manuscript toward point B.
Yet how can you fluidly weave in all that depth and complexity without stalling pace and story momentum—getting bogged down in info dumps, flashbacks, or just too much exposition? As an author, how do you glance backward while still moving the story forward?
Let’s look at some practical techniques for developing and revealing who your characters were and are without slowing down the story of where they’re going, using three main ways of bringing in backstory: context, memory, and flashback.
Context
People don’t operate in a vacuum or on a single plane of existence. No matter how compelling our current challenges, conflicts, or goals may be, our experiences in any given moment are a sum total of all our previous experiences, memories, hopes, desires, worries that may be simultaneously present within us.
But dumping in swaths of a character’s backstory can stall momentum and yank readers out of the story. Instead, look for ways to weave this essential context in amid the forward motion of the scene.
Let’s say you have a scene where you’re showing your protag being fired. Unless her workplace has been a significant part of the story, readers may not know enough backstory to invest us, to let us know what’s at stake, to plant our feet in the impact of this event on her life and her arc. Depending on the purpose of this plot development, we might wonder:
What is she being fired for? Is it deserved or unjust? In either case, why is it happening? Did she know this was coming, or suspect it? What’s her boss like, and what’s her relationship with him? Her coworkers? How does she feel about this job? How long has she been with this company, and in this position? Is she good at what she does? What’s her immediate financial situation without a job? And her prospects for other employment?
This is just a sampling of the context that might be germane—key to letting readers know why this event is important, what it means to her and her arc. So how can you include this essential information without swaths of info dump that stop forward momentum cold?
Think of weaving threads into a tapestry, rather than basting in discrete swatches of a patchwork quilt. For instance:
Leah knew the moment she walked toward her corner office that something was amiss. Her door, always open literally and figuratively—always—was shut, and there was a strange hush in the usually high-spirited ad department. Even Jack, the only member of her team of company superstars who seemed to have endless time to unload some long-winded personal story no matter how diligently the rest of them were focused on a project, avoided her eyes as she passed his desk.
Which was when she realized—Thurber. The VP was the only person who could make even Jack fall silent. Seeing him in her office when she opened the door was no surprise; finding him lounging in her chair with his feet on her desk was. Gerald Thurber wasn’t what anyone would call chill, and he drew a rigid hierarchy of boundaries at work.
And that could only mean that today was the day he’d finally made his move to get her out of his hair—after almost ten years of trying. If he had hair. Which, she thought meanly, he didn’t.
That was beneath you. The disapproving voice in her head was her father’s, but considering her boss knew that her loan application for her mom’s spot at the senior center had been filed yesterday, she’d give herself a bye on this one. Thurber’s timing was designed to create the highest agony quotient possible.
Look how many of the above questions are answered in this short passage: We can assume Leah is good at her job, judging by the fact that she has a corner office, the top-performing team, and that her hostile boss hasn’t found anything to fire her for in the at least ten years she’s been in this position. She probably has a good relationship with her coworkers—indicated by her open-door policy, as well as their high spirits and diligence and her appreciation for it (minus garrulous Jack, who seems like the weak link).
We know she seems to have an adversarial relationship with her boss and that he’s been gunning for her for a while—and that he’s probably enjoying this (shown through his out-of-character body language and claiming her desk, his apparently deliberate timing to cause her the most hardship). We also know what’s at stake for her in her instant concern about this affecting her qualification for a loan she needs to care for her mom.
We even know a little about who she is from these context cues: we can assume from them that she may be likable, caring, responsible, that she had a disapproving father and tries to be “good” (in that she’s giving herself a bye this time, suggesting she rarely does otherwise), that she’s a little bit snarky. There’s a lot of context packed into this brief scene, and you can continue to fill in more as it continues, but it’s laced amid the forward thrust of the scene—Leah’s about to get fired.
Look for ways you can weave in details like this throughout your story to create depth, dimension, and color and bring the characters and situations fully to life without stopping a scene’s momentum to “fill the reader in.” Let us see not just the protagonist’s current quandary, but the rich tapestry of her character and her world that forms the backdrop for it.
Memory
Quick—tell me about the happiest day of your life.
Chances are when that day springs to mind, it doesn’t start from the beginning and play out chronologically. That’s not how we remember. Memory functions more as a slide show than a movie—meaning the most impactful moments of our lives are burned into visceral images that we then fill in details around.
For instance, if something calls to mind my wedding day, the first vivid picture in my memory is walking down the aisle between all the guests and seeing no one’s face but my husband’s; I see the Texas hill country splayed out behind him, feel the sun beating down on my bare shoulders, remember that floaty time-out-of-time feeling I’d never had before or since. Then my mind might begin to fill in more of the details of that day, but the lead-in memories—the ones that directly tie into the question about a happy day—are those sensory flashes.
Keep in mind three key characteristics in how we recall memory:
- It’s directly tied to some stimulus in the present moment (asking about a happy day in this case).
- It happens in flashes, not full scenes, which are usually attached to strong emotion.
- In narrative, it should also illuminate the character’s current situation or arc.
So let’s say our fired ad exec, Leah, remembers the first time she met Thurber. It makes sense that memory is sparked by his firing her today, so we see that it meets the first criterion of being prompted by the present moment. Perhaps you weave it in like this:
Thurber never even got up as she started clearing her desk, sitting in her chair watching her as if she were the maid and he was lord of the manor.
It was the flip side of his avuncular demeanor the day she’d first started, when he’d wrapped a hand too tight around her shoulders and said, “Well, the ad department’s never looked more attractive.” She’d held her tongue then—she was a fresh hire and told herself she was oversensitive because of her father’s constant belittling, that maybe Thurber was simply trying to be welcoming and didn’t realize his dismissive sexist overtones.
Notice the memory doesn’t start with her walking into her new company, or being introduced to Thurber, or even any other element of that first conversation. It starts like great stories start, en medias res, with the key moment that defines the memory in her mind, and only the details directly pertinent to that moment and in turn the present moment.
And notice that we’ve also salted in a bit more context on her relationship with her dad, another thread in the tapestry we’re weaving in little by little throughout the story to create the full picture.
Memory is a wonderful way to fill in a character’s backstory, but keep it firmly planted in those three key concepts. And just as with context, lace it in instead of dumping it—a piece can amply represent the whole.
Flashback
Flashbacks are very much like memory in that they should spring directly from something happening in the present story and illuminate something about it. But they can also be an essential component of the plot or character arc, part of a thread of a subplot or secondary story line, etc. If memory happens in flashes, then flashbacks are where you can show the full scene.
But think of them as herbs you might use in cooking—the right amount of basil is an essential flavor component of a caprese salad, but it takes over a pesto sauce. If your flashback is pulling that much focus, you may not be telling the right part of the story in your manuscript. Use them judiciously.
The main thing to remember in handling flashbacks, in addition to the three key components of memory, is to lead the reader into and out of them fluidly and organically so they’re a seamless part of the story, rather than yanking the reader out of it.
That means don’t hang a neon sign on a coming flashback—the equivalent of the cheesy chime sound effect or screen wipe in old TV shows and films. As soon as you announce one with phrases like, “She remembered it as if it were yesterday” or “That day played like a movie in her mind” or “She thought back to that moment…” you’ve planted a signpost—Flashback ahead!—that pulls readers out of the narrative (and may induce them to put your book down).
Lead us into the flashback the way you do with memory: with a clear event that sparks that memory in that exact moment, and the impactful images that define it. Then you can play the full scene out.
Two more flashback caveats:
- There’s no need to set them off in italics. Chunks of italicized text are hard to read and can overwhelm readers (and are often the hallmark of a less experienced author). If they’re well paved in readers will understand that this is a flashback and verb tense will do the rest.
- Be careful not to overdo past-perfect verb tense in flashbacks/memory (“she had been planning,” “she’d known,” etc.); it quickly gets unwieldy. The occasional well-placed usage is all you need to orient readers; then you can simply switch to past tense.
The main thing to remember with backstory is that it should never impede a story’s forward momentum. As long as you keep your focus on the main story and weave backstory in as threads to add depth, color, and dimension, you’ll create the full, rich picture.
About Tiffany Yates Martin
Tiffany Yates Martin has spent nearly thirty years as an editor in the publishing industry, working with major publishers and NYTimes, WaPo, WSJ, and USA Today bestselling, award-winning authors as well as indie and newer writers, and is the founder of FoxPrint Editorial and author of the Amazon bestseller IntuitiveEditing: A Creative and Practical Guide to Revising Your Writing. She's led workshops and seminars for conferences and writers' groups across the country and is a frequent contributor to writers' sites and publications. Under the pen name Phoebe Fox, she's the author of six novels, including the upcoming The Way We Weren't (Berkley).
Love these examples! Terrific. Thanks.
:) Thanks, Jamie.
Great points, and definitely some vivid examples.
One key part of this is what you said about memory: it’s not chronological. Context of course happens during the scene itself and uses that sequence, but memories are things the character’s already “packed up” and organized to fit their needs. They’ll remember what’s most important to them or most related to what just happened, bounce through some other thoughts, and that’s all they need.
Which is what makes flashbacks unusual: they’re making the effort to “unpack” the memories and go through them in full sequence again, and people *don’t do that* often. Movies love it because it goes with being a visual medium, but for real people it takes a good reason to push their thoughts into something that’s more like a flashback than a memory.
Agreed! I think that almost never happens, that we have full chronological recall of an event. It’s more fragmented, like snapshots, accompanied by flashes of emotion. That can be hard to effect in our writing, though, in a way that feels organic and serves the story. I’ve found it’s a practice effect, though, and that the more we really sit and examine our memories almost from an outside perspective, the easier it gets. Great point about film–though I think lately we see more storytellers in that medium offering flashbacks more realistically the way we’re talking about. And that “shorthanding” of the memories is a great point too. Thanks for the comment, Ken!
Thank you for such a comprehensive, practical, and clear exposition, Tiffany! “Backstory dump” is something I’ve worked hard to reduce in my writing (still working on it!) so I’ve learned a few strategies to add to what you offer. One is to highlight all the back material in a scene, take it all out, and paste it into a separate Word document. How does the scene read without it? If it’s really vital, then I try breaking it into smaller chunks and condensing each chunk into a single sentence or two. The proportion of back story to front story, and the placement of those tidbits, can make a huge difference. In my current WIP I wrote a two-page biography of one of the main characters (not the POV character but her love interest) because I needed to know his life story in order to really feel him as a complete human being. But I have have been amazed to see how little of that is actually needed in the manuscript! There is a difference, clearly, between the back story that the author needs to know and the back story that the reader needs to know!
Great point–and it’s true. I think the author needs to know a lot more than the reader is necessarily told–but all that “prep work” is still necessary and often finds its way into the tapestry of the story thread by thread. Love your technique of stripping it all out to assess how well the story stands without it. Thanks for the comment!
Golden nuggets, as always, Tiffany! Thanks for the reminder, as I dig into a new book!
Thanks, Laura! Good luck with the newest WIP, you prolific thing, you. :)
Backstory is my nemesis! Intuitive editing helped immensely as I edited and revised and edited and revised…well, you get the picture. This article is saved in my Scrivener Nuggets project. Thank you!
This DELIGHTS me to hear–thank you! :) I think backstory is a lot of authors’ nemesis–that’s why I wrote this piece, actually; I’ve heard a lot of authors asking for something on the subject lately. Thanks, Kathy–I’m so pleased Intuitive Editing has been helpful for you.
Tiffany, I have been reworking parts of my novel and as I read your post today, I could see where things are working and where I need some editing. This post is a keeper and one I will keep as a reference. Thanks so much, Beth
Thanks, Beth! I’m so happy to hear it’s useful. Good luck with your revisions!
Great tips! As a writer who uses a lot of backstory and memory to build story, I can appreciate every word.
Thanks, Barbara–you do it beautifully already, but I’m pleased to hear this is helpful. Good luck with your WIP!
Tiffany: I always like it when craft lessons are illustrated with actual examples from text so I appreciate you doing that here. Lately I’ve trained myself to notice snippets of backstory when I read other’s novels – it brings home to me how subtle it can be– a sentence here, a sentence there, yet it makes the story comes alive and the characters seems real. They lived a life prior to the story and weaving that life in is necessary if you want readers to accept them as fully-functioning human beings, not stick figures.
Thank you, Maggie. That’s a brilliant way of learning to notice how backstory can seamlessly (or not!) inform the narrative. I love dissecting stories like a pithed frog to see how they work. :) I’m doing the same thing right now as I work on a webinar presentation based on this topic–I’m pulling out examples from stories where the backstory is layered in almost imperceptibly, but adds so much texture and depth. It’s funny how invisible it can be until you’re looking for it specifically. Thanks for the comment!
Tiffany, on the strength of this post, I’ve ordered Intuitive Editing (not my usual practice— because of the budget, you know). Thanks for your insights.
I hooted at your mention of dissecting a pithed frog. Ah, the memories! My lab partner was squeamish, so I always did the pithing. (I actually got a poem from that experience; maybe it’s material for something more?)
First, thank you! I hope you find the book useful–I’d love to hear (it’s a many-years-in-the-making passion project). Second I WAS YOUR SQUEAMISH LAB PARTNER. At least in the metaphorical sense. :) I learned early on to pair off with one of the football jocks in lab–they were generally willing to dive right into the innards and I could sit back and observe. Good training for becoming an editor, actually… :D Thanks for the comment, Anna! Hope you like Intuitive Editing.
Great stuff!! Really needed to read this today.
Thanks, Cindy! Glad it was helpful.
I needed this today! Thank you.
Glad to hear it, Boo! Thanks for commenting.
Fantastic post, thank you, Tiffany. I love the concept of flashbacks being like herbs in cooking. I am working hard at “sprinkling” them in at present in my writing. I notice I tend to skip over chunks of backstory when reading a novel personally. Off to order your book right now. Just what I need!
I am BIG on metaphors and similes (as you’ll see when you read my book–thanks for ordering it). :) They help me conceptualize things more easily too. Backstory is so essential, but I agree–when it impedes the story it just feels like pulling me out of the world and thrusting me backward. But used well it can be seamless and add so much richness and depth. Hope you find Intuitive Editing helpful, Davina–and thanks for the comment!
I see where you’re coming from, and I like the notion of not using italics for flashbacks, but your take on using italics for flashbacks is the polar opposite of what I read in bestselling books by successful and experienced authors so I’m hesitant not to use italics for the flashback scenes in my story. At Least in thriller/crime fiction books.
Do you have any books you recommend that use the non-italics flashback scenes so I can see it in action?
Just saw this, Alan. I actually rarely see italics used in flashbacks in my own reading, nor in the projects I work on as an editor–but then again I don’t read that much in the thriller/crime fic genres. It’s a minor enough point that I wouldn’t stress too much about it–whatever you decide, a publishing house is going to format it per their house style anyway. My suggestion would be to err on the side of the majority (in my experience) if you’re submitting and avoid big italicized sections because it can tend to turn off agents and readers…but I’m a big fan of making your own rules. :)
Love this. Thank you for the clear examples.