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The Trouble with Frosting

Photobucket - Video and Image Hosting [1] Confession: This is a recycled post. I wrote this in 2006 — the first year of WU’s existence, before my debut novel was finished, picked up by an agent, and sold. Before my second novel was even imagined. But recently the dangers of polishing a manuscript prematurely came up in conversation, and I thought it might be time to revisit this spin. And this photo.


In honor of The Moon Sisters being named a Best Book of 2014 by Library Journal [2] and also by BookRiot [3], I’d like to offer up a signed copy. If you’re interested in winning, please leave a note in comments saying as much. I’ll choose randomly from the interested commenters next week, and get a copy out the door in time for holiday gift-giving–or reading.

Now for the main course.

Frosting as I’m going to use it here doesn’t refer to anything involving confectioner’s sugar, however it’s just as important to an author interested in presentation and consumption as it is to a baker. Frosting isn’t anything central to your story; it will never appear in an outline. Frosting refers to things like chapter titles, poignant lines, funny quips, clever innuendo, even the arrangement of scenes in some cases. With this analogy, the cake itself is your core story—the plot, the characters, the voice.

If you’re like most people, you like frosting—as an eater and a reader—but as a writer we must be careful of it. Writing a draft that’s too pretty, too perfected with its minutiae, can make it painfully difficult later to edit. You may be at risk for this problem if you often find yourself charmed with details of your own writing, because when it’s time to make necessary edits, you may unconsciously (or even consciously) warp your scenes in order to keep those sculpted sugar-flower words and colorful arrangements. “But they’re sooo sweet, sooo pretty,” you may whine to yourself, struggling to have your cake and frosting too.

Truth is, you should never make a decision about a scene based on frosting; story details cannot hold sway over the story itself when it’s time to edit. Sometimes it works out and you may find a way to keep your favorite bits in a way that doesn’t seem forced, but other times you will have to pick up your editorial knife and scrape your artistic work away completely.

Your best bet? Know when to frost a scene to prevent the painful “unfrosting” process. Here’s how:

Bake your cake. When you’re in draft mode, resist thinking about finishing touches, including anything that has you reaching for the thesaurus. As one of my critique buddies advises, write a quick-and-dirty first draft to be sure the story itself is working before you worry about prettying it up. Just bake your cake.

Be sure it’s truly cooked. Don’t give in to the urge to over-edit scenes until the entire first draft of the entire manuscript is complete. Oh, this can be so hard, I know, but would you ever start frosting the cooked edges of a cake before the whole is baked? It just doesn’t make sense to start perfecting a part before the whole is before you.

Cool your cake. Give your cake time to “cool” after the first draft of your WIP is completed, and don’t sit and watch it cool either. Time away from your story is critical, because fresh eyes may see where improvements should be made to the structure before you continue. Sometimes the unthinkable happens and a cake collapses after it’s removed from the oven; never frost a collapsed cake.

Brush off loose crumbs. Take one more nit-picking look at your work, with a sharp eye on pacing, setting and scene arrangement, before thinking about the little extras.

Frost evenly and with care. Make sure the bulk of what your reader will “taste” when they consume your story is your story. Don’t put undue emphasis on the clever additions.

Be creative. Almost anyone can frost a cake. What can you do to make your extras distinctive and interesting?

Even with your best efforts, you may occasionally have to sacrifice favorite scenes, lines, etc… for the good of your story. In his book James A. Michener’s Writer’s Handbook, Michener said,

I love the rich embellishment of a statement, the marshaling of arcane data, the retelling of illustrative incident, and the hammering down of the point I seek to make.

He describes a notation from his editor about a piece of writing, something I think Michener would admit was frosting: a clever insertion into one of his manuscripts about Gene Lockhart and his daughter June. The fact that his editor asked Michener to cut it was described as

…the most difficult annotation of all.

No one, not even the most successful authors, wants to scrape frosting, but Michener gets it, acknowledging both the reasoning behind the passage and his editor’s valid point.

In this instance I wanted to refer to that delightful actor Gene Lockhart because I had recently acted on an informal stage in Belgium with his daughter, June. The passage could be cut. Sorry, June.

When it happens, take a moment to soliloquize if you need to, then pick up your editorial knife. Sugar happens. Sugar carnage must also happen.

Do you ever have trouble with frosting? Follow the crumb-trail to comments. And don’t forget to holler if you’d like to win a copy of The Moon Sisters.

About Therese Walsh [4]

Therese Walsh co-founded WU in 2006 and is the site's editorial director. She was the architect and 1st editor of WU's only book, Author in Progress [5], and orchestrates the WU UnConference. [6] Her second novel, The Moon Sisters [7], was named one of the best books of the year by Library Journal and Book Riot; and her debut, The Last Will of Moira Leahy [8] was a Target Breakout Book. Sign up for her newsletter [9] to be among the first to learn about her new projects (or follow her on BookBub [10]). Learn more on her website [11].