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I hate sirens
. E, especially at night. , Whenever I hear one, slicing through the silence like , sharp as a scalpel . Whenever I hear the screech of an ambulance, I make the sign of the cross. My mother taught me that. “It’s a silent prayer,” she my mother always said. I can’t help but always wonder what awful event the ambulance is rushing toward, triggered a frantic call to 911 and if my prayer made a difference. But, I’m shaking too much at the moment to make the sign of the cross. Because tonight, I’m the event and right now, the gesture feels pathetic, inadequate.  [Read more…]