Editing to Life – Characterization
Lydia Sharp on Feb 16 2012 | Filed under: CRAFT
There is a saying in writerly circles, that a manuscript can reach a point where it’s been edited to death. The writer has produced so many new drafts that the life has been sucked out of the story, leaving nothing but a dry, cracked shell. Not even a shadow of the author’s original vision for the piece.
To prevent this morbid scenario, you must have a plan for editing to life. To start, it is a good idea to take a break from the story once you’ve typed END. Step away from it (still keeping it in your sights) and work on something new for a while. However long “a while” is will be different for each person.
The longer I refrain from working a story, blocking its outlet, the built up energy creates illumination. The brighter it shines, the more clearly I can see into dark corners of the story that need rearranging, redesigning, or recycling. This is macro editing. When a true lightbulb moment occurs, I will apply the revision to my manuscript and then let it all simmer again.
Once you feel there is nothing more significant you can do in terms of macro editing, you enter the dangerous territory of micro editing. The project has officially exhausted you (you just want it to be done already!), and because you narrow your focus down to the minutiae, you start seeing more that is wrong with your work than what is right. You can easily lose sight of what got you excited about it in the first place.
Micro editing is where manuscripts are either murdered or are given vibrant new life. All the major cuts have been made. All the major holes have been filled. This is where characterization is whispered rather than shouted, where descriptions are sprinkled rather than dumped, where foreshadow is carefully planted rather than pounded into the wrong soil.
The number one thing in any novel–any genre, any type–that gets me to keep reading, is characterization. A unique premise will initially get my attention, but that readerly excitement can disappear within the very first chapter if the characters aren’t up to snuff.
I’ve found the following tips and resources to be extremely helpful to my own editing process.
- The Bookshelf Muse’s Character Trait Thesaurus
This blog is run by two adept novelists, and features unique writing aides like a Setting Thesaurus, an Emotion Thesaurus, a Symbolism Thesaurus, and many others. The Character Trait Thesaurus spotlights individual character traits (i.e. modest, charismatic, impulsive) by defining it and applying it to literary examples. It then goes a step further and shows what pitfalls to avoid through cliché, and even offers ways to twist a stereotype. Links to all thesaurus entries are in the sidebar.
- Craft Books, Articles, and Breakout Prompts by Donald Maass
Not exaggerating here. I didn’t even slightly understand what the word characterization really meant until I was introduced to Don’s wisdom and advice. Read read read the following. You’ll never look at writing the same way again.
- Reenactment and Observation
One of the best ways to learn is through hands-on experience. If you have a family member who is willing to reenact a scene with you, this is especially helpful in exposing stilted dialogue. It can also show you where you may need to add pausing and certain actions, or where the best place would be for interior thought without it feeling like your viewpoint character just mentally stepped off-stage and left the other guy shaking his head in confusion. Why are you spacing out, we were in the middle of an argument!
Observation of people who don’t know you’re watching, or don’t care (within reason, of course–I’m not suggesting we all become creepy stalker peeping Toms), is especially helpful in pinpointing mannerisms and quirks that can add rich depth to a flat character. Most often, the people I observe are family members, close neighbors, and co-workers, aka people I see on a regular basis by simply living my life. I also have the privilege of working with the general public, so whenever I notice a stand-out trait on a person, I bank it until my next writing session.
For example, while working on a novel last year I noticed someone who blinked in rhythm. Pause. Blink blink blink. Pause. Blink blink blink. This was exactly what I needed to add to one of my characters to make her more blatantly odd. According to everyone who has read that novel thus far, it worked.
These little details are a big part of what brings characters to life, makes them interesting and worth reading about.
- Avoiding Cliché Like
the PlagueUnless a character is meant to be cheesily stereotypical in some way, there is no excuse for using uncreative, tired clichés in your prose. It is quite possibly the most effective way to kill a story. Conversely, using rarely-seen or never-before-seen phrases and comparisons in your narrative presents the viewpoint character as unique. Alive. The reader will be more likely to follow an innovative character.
If I catch myself typing a common cliché, I either come up with something better right away, or leave a blank spot in the sentence so I can fill it in later. Avoid cliché like a Coke rocket.
- Random Page Analysis
When you know you’re close to done, enter the total number of pages of your novel into a random number generator. Each number represents a page of your novel. However many you want to analyze is completely up to you.
Print out the pages that you randomly selected and study each one on its own. Are the characters alive on that page? Do they stand out as unique in some way (either through dialogue, quirks, viewpoint, etc.)? If not, revise. Then apply what you’ve just learned about your prose to the rest of that scene in your document, or to the rest of the novel if necessary. This exercise is both effective and addictive. Feel free to indulge.
Has anyone else tried these tips and resources? What were your results? Do you have anything to add to this list? Please share your thoughts in the comments!
Happy Editing,
~Lydia
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All great tips, Lydia! There always comes a point during revisions when I wonder if the changes I’ve made are for worse instead of better. Thank goodness for my writing buddies!
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You’re sending me back to my stories, Lydia, to review and improve characterizations. Good post. Thanks.
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Yup, great tips. Is nit picking the same as revisions? This is what I do endlessly.
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Lydia, you’ve provided great tips and some interesting links to explore. I’ve had a manuscript cooling for a little over a year and am coming up on the time when I need to take a fresh look at it, so this post is timely. Thanks!
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Lydia, this is a fantastic post packed with so many practical tips. Thanks so much. One thing I tried when I did NaNo was to write scenes out of sequence, especially when I got stuck. I was 20000 words into the story when I decided I needed to write the ending. I did that mainly because I needed to figure out the ending, or more precisely how to get there, before I could proceed. I ended up with 7500 words to end the story and when I went back to where I got stuck things really fell into place. That’s my tip. Thanks again.
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That’s a great tip! I’ve done it myself– it really works! :D
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Great tip about macro-editing – blocking the outlet until everything about the story becomes clear. I’ve done it myself and it’s amazing what a difference it makes when you eventually sit down and let all the thoughts come out. Much more organized and structured. It’s easy to jump in with both feet when you get a new idea, but without properly assessing it beforehand, you can end up easily writing yourself into a corner. Thanks for the post.
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Perfect timing with this post! I’m editing my book from Nanowrimo right now, and I really appreciate the advice!!
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I’m with CG on writing out of sequence. My process is to block out the entire story in a bullet point scene listing then write those scenes as the spirit moves. Later I cut-and-paste and write transition detail. Anyhow, it works for me.
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I’m at the point of revising fatigue– I used to love coming home to revise!! I hope I don’t revise it to death though. Love your idea of the random page generator, I might try that…
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Thank you, Linda, for an informative post! I find my deadlines hurry me along so that I don’t have time to edit to death *laugh*. But, I have learned that sometimes a phrase or scene I think needs to come out will turn out to be a favorite of a reader! The only way I found out this is either by a beta reader telling me (and I hurry and put the phrase/scene back in! lawd!) or I decide to leave it in but shrug at it, and receive happy mail about it . . . lawd again!
On the flipside, something I think is “great” is never noticed. :-D
Sometimes we really are just “too close” to it – we’ve written and re-written and read and re-read, so there has to be that time we say “done,” and concentrate on looking for those little nitty typo things.
Love the post!
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Good point! I wouldn’t trade my beta readers for a lifetime supply of cheesecake. ;-)
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Thank you so much for the kind mention, Lydia. :) You always offer such solid and thoughtful advice, so this means a lot! You’ve got some great strategies here for a big problem we all have as writers. I love the random generator/page idea and am going to use this. Characterization is something I am still struggling with, so posts like this really help!
Angela @ The Bookshelf Muse
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“The longer I refrain from working a story, blocking its outlet, the built up energy creates illumination.”
Yes! Exactly. I feel that all the time, from a tiny candle flicker on a daily basis, to a HUGE supernova explosion when I’m away from my stories for a few weeks. It’s built-up energy, it’s an itch. Thank you for putting it into words.
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Perfect. I’m editing (again/yet) and I suddenly had a fear you put into words for me. Was I editing the life out of my characters? One of my big issues is word count, so pruning has been a big part of my process. Thanks, Lydia, for these characterization tips and for the inspiration. Just what the doctor ordered (oops, sorry, that’s my last cliche today).
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Such a smart post. Thank you, Lydia! (And, psst, readers — The Bookshelf Muse is on the WU “Box Cutter” section of our sidebar.)
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Along with what everybody else is saying, I just have to chime in–what a great list of resources. Thanks so much!
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Yes to all the resources you’ve mentioned! I haven’t tried the random page technique, but that’s appealing and bite-sized.
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“…that’s appealing and bite-sized.”
Thanks, Jan, now I’m hungry! ;-)
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Wow. Thanks for the awesome props. I especially like the “run by two adept novelists” part ;).
I’ve never considered running through dialogue with someone else, but this is a fabulous idea–as good as reading aloud the other parts.
Thanks again for the mention and for this really helpful post.
Becca @ The Bookshelf Muse
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Oh wow, thank you for this! How have I never come across The Bookshelf Muse before!?! That’s definitely going to come in handy! :)
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Go Lydia! I’ve seen too many manuscripts where the life was edited out by critique partners that were trying to follow the rules! So choosing crit partners and beta readers is important – and learning which feedback to ignore!
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Wonderful tips!! I ADORE The Bookshelf Muse, it has helped me SO much. I’ve gotten Donal Maas’ The Breakout Novelist recently too, and I love to listen to and observe people.
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Bookshelf Muse? What a great idea! Thanks for that and all your very apt advice, Lydia!
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I love the idea of Hubby acting out scenes. He’s gonna love that idea! Great tips.
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There is a fine line when it comes to editing. Not enough and the manuscript is heavy and clotted. Too much and the story becomes empty. I think a second or even third set of eyes can help us stay from straying over the edge.
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As someone who is currently working the micro edit like a villain (12th Draft!), I can vouch for every part of this point. My wife is begging me to stop tinkering, but my agent has gently prodded me to this place and I’m glad for it. So long as I continue to do it with care, I know I’ll be just fine.
I don’t exactly act out scenes, but reading them aloud has been a huge help. It’s amazing how many sentences and phrases suddenly pop out as wrong when read aloud.
Great post, Lydia!
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Picking a random page to edit is so helpful, especially when it comes to more technical edits, but it’s very useful for fixing problems with characters, as well. If you can read a page and get an understanding for who a character is, then you’re doing great! If you can interchange the characters on the page, though, then you probably need to work on bringing them to life.
Reading aloud is great for determining the flow of your work and also catching any typos or odd phrasings. If your tongue trips up, the reader’s eyes probably will, too.
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This is a smart take on revision. Thank you, Lydia!
Truly, there is a huge difference between macro and micro editing, and the editing to death or editing to life concepts. I agree with the use of time away from a story to re-approach it well for a life-giving edit.
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Lydia,
I’m a HUGE fan of using props to act out my character’s actions. I recall one time wondering if my character could actually jump from the back of a wagon as the wagon was traveling up a slight hill.
So, I trudged down the hallway into my son’s room, dug out his toy covered wagon and some plastic horses, then went into my daughter’s room and fished out a “Polly Pocket” doll.
Armed with this bunch of silliness, I proceeded to “act out” my scene which proved valuable because I figured out I would have to have the wagon turning slightly to the left to have my scene work.
Yay for kids toys during the writing process :)
Great post!
Christi Corbett
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LOL! That’s awesome, Christi. :-)
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Great post, sage advice.
Thanks for the links to the Bookshelf Muse’s Thesaurus. I had never seen it before and I think it is a very valuable writing resource. I plan to share it with my clients, many of whom are revising nonfiction manuscripts.
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Ditto on never having seen the Bookshelf Muse’s Thesaurus. That’s going to get a daily visit from now on! I find tvtropes.org to work as a kind of narrative thesaurus as well (though that isn’t its intention), and I go there to read up on various character types/actions.
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Love this! Thank you! This post encourages me to stick with my plan and let this manuscript go soon. Doing a combo macro/micro edit now. I read through the whole thing quickly Friday and Saturday, making notes and small edits and then all day yesterday made reams of notes. The stack of pages I have now feel pretty dang close. I’m going to check the Bookshelf Muse’s Thesaurus as I make this round of edits to hopefully edit the life into it…and then I’m going to send it to my agent before I edit the life out of it. Thanks again!
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