On cliff-hanger chapter endings
Ray Rhamey on Aug 19 2010 | Filed under: CRAFT
A writer who frequents my blog, Flogging the Quill, asked me this question:
“How about chapter endings? Must they always end with a cliff-hanging, hyperventilating, page turning, stomach churning, my-God-I-ripped-the-pages-trying-to-find-what-comes-next? I just realized my ms is structured chronologically and some chapters seem to end naturally with everyone going to sleep at the end of a day, and I’m looking for excuses to leave it as it is.”
I know what she’s facing. The story is moving along. A chapter seems solid, it advances the plot or characterizes or both. It feels good. But what happens at the end of the chapter doesn’t clench your mental knuckles. Is that a problem? I can give you a definite maybe.
Agent Cherry Weiner once took a look at a period mystery of mine. Her rejection letter told me that “the characters were good and the story was interesting. But I could put it down.”
That’s what agents and acquisition editors are looking for—something they don’t want to put down. The brain cells these pros use to evaluate fiction have calluses. What do you think it’s going to take to create a story they can’t put down?
Does this need necessarily mean that every chapter must “always end with a cliff-hanging, hyperventilating, page turning, stomach churning, my-God-I-ripped-the-pages-trying-to-find-what-comes-next?”
The answer: not if you have enough accumulated tension
Whether at chapter beginning, middle, or end, what every story must do is continually raise story questions that are so provocative, so engaging, so rife with intrigue, that the reader is compelled to keep reading. The key to creating overarching tension is that story questions can be cumulative; they can add up to create an overriding level of tension in the reader. It’s that level of tension that carries readers through exposition and description.
In one of my works in progress, a protagonist has just escaped torture and death at the hands of a not-so-ethical Homeland Security agent. He’s lost his job. He’s on the run. He can’t return to his life to care for his autistic son. The reader knows that pursuit will continue. The future he faces raises many story questions—how will he take care of his son? Will he escape this unjustified hounding by a relentless agent? How can he prove his innocence?
More than that, the reader knows that the man who rescued the protagonist has nefarious plans to exploit him to commit a horrendous crime against humanity. Story question: will the bad guy succeed in betraying the protagonist?
In the chapter following his harrowing escape, things relax for the protagonist. He is given hope by the man who rescued him that things will be all right. The protagonist reaches a safe haven. He is cared for and, even more fun, seduced by a beautiful, provocative young woman. The chapter ends in the midst of their love-making.
While the chapter ends with a scene that is far from a cliff-hanger, the sum of story questions in the reader’s mind is so powerful by now that putting those questions on hold for this moment of peace actually increases the tension because the reader knows that trouble is coming, bigtime.
Put another way: you’re in a tree on a hilltop. Beneath the tree a couple is having a picnic lunch, laughing, kissing. No tension there. But then you see something that they can’t see—a gigantic bull with deathly sharp horns is charging straight at them. You’re going to want to see what happens next, right?
Therein lies the best answer I have for the writer’s question about chapter endings. It may be fine for a chapter to end without people dangling over the edge of a precipice if the reader knows that terrible trouble is inevitable and coming on strong. In that case, surely the tension is increased. But I think this technique must be used with care.
The non-cliffhanger chapter must still be riveting in its own way, with unanticipated twists and turns that keep the story questions coming. And I don’t think you can defer getting back to the white-knuckle part for too long, else the reader will become frustrated.
However, all that said, it makes sense to work darned hard to make sure that every chapter ends with narrative that escalates the tension. Even if cumulative tension is strong enough to do the job, why not keep piling it on if you can?
For what it’s worth.
Ray
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Ray,
Great explanation of a hot button topic. Depending on the genre, cliffhangers can be few and far between. I like your expression accumulated tension and will keep this technique in mind. Thanks for sharing.
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This is helpful; thanks for sharing. I esp. like the analogy at the end. Gonna go back and polish my ms!
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Thanks for the post! I was just thinking about this on my commute to work this morning, because I’m starting a new, plot-driven book, whereas in the past I’ve had mostly character- or emotion-driven books that didn’t require the same kind of forward momentum. (Still required forward momentum, of course, just not the same kind. :P)
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Great, informative post. This will definitely be helpful as I’ve just started revising my WIP, and this is something I need to pay extra attention to. Thanks!
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Good way of putting it: “accumulated tension.” I like it, and agree!
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I don’t necessarily think it has to be a cliff hanger, but it does need to draw the reader into the next chapter. I like to write with the idea of leaving my readers wanting more.
If we always leave our chapters with cliff hangers, you don’t leave your readers with time to absorb what they’ve read. To me writing and reading flow more, when we use what I call a ‘rollercoaster effect’. Give them plenty of highs but some low’s too. (Hugs)Indigo
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Long ago, as my habit is to read in bed, I learned that if I was going to get to sleep, I should stop reading mid page, mid chapter. When I began writing, I was advised never to give a reader the excuse to put down the book. I think that’s why the trend is now to these 3 to 4 page chapters–it’s easy to flip ahead and say, “I can read one more.” And while I don’t think every chapter needs to end on a cliff-hanger, it does need to end on a ‘hook.’ A question. An unexpected response to something that unfolded in the scene. I was told never, never end a chapter with a character going to sleep because the reader will to.
I finished my first manuscript without any chapter breaks. I went back and added them at all the wrong places — characters driving away or going to bed. I found the most effective way to fix that was to delete the last few paragraphs of my scenes.
Donald Maass speaks of “microtension” and I think that goes right along with your “accumulated tension.”
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Great post! Tension, tension, tension!!! Spot on.
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Excellent post. I got a great rejection once that mentioned I didn’t have enough line-by-line tension. There’s plenty overall in my ms, but this comment transformed my writing by reminding me that you can’t take your eye off the reader for a second. Not if you want the book published.
Your post is a great reminder!
Martina
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This is great! I completely agree. I notice in my reading that not all book chapters end with a cliffhanger and often ends with some kind of tension. That makes me want to turn the page just as much as an action-packed ending.
Great post! Thanks for the examples and tips!
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Publishers and agents are fools with an acute anxiety disorder. The truth is, if your writing is good, readers will be hooked, period. Think of huge pile of classics that withstood the test of time without relying on such tricks! Think of the Adventures of Huckleberry Finn, for example. Or the antithesis of the cliffhanger advice: Grimm’s Fairy Tales, a collection of unconnected short stories that nevertheless keep the reader interested throughout the whole book. Or do you think anybody would publish anything like The Lord of the Rings nowadays, if it began with “Concerning Hobbits” and had near “pointless” chapters like “In the House of Tom Bombadil”? This whole keep-the-reader-hooked-at-all-costs is symptomatic of a neurotic industry that has lost all confidence in its craft, hence its reliance on a cocktails of such tricks.
Last, but not least: have you people ever considered self-publishing? That way you’re answerable to no one but yourself. To hell with what publishers and agents want! No more idiots that tell you they can’t sell your book because it doesn’t make readers anxious enough to find out what’s next! (what happened to reading to relax, anyway?) Feels like the movie Scrooged‘s grandma-killing TV ad…
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First–love the picture. Absolutely perfect!
Second–I like chapter endings to compel the reader to turn the page, but I don’t think it needs to be because someone is facing a firing squad.
On occasion I’ve used dialogue to do the same trick. Ending a chapter with a compelling question (or something) that isn’t answered until the next chap begins.
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Excellent thoughts and ideas. I’m working through some of these issues while trudging along in my first ms. Thanx for the post.
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It might be too much pressure to make every chapter out a “cliff-hanging, hyperventilating” ending. Instead, I always shoot for an “uh-oh.” It doesn’t have to be earth-shattering. It could be as simple as the character runs out of gas at a crucial moment. The trick is to get the reader to worry, and then make them read on to ease that worry.
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Wrong. Seeing two people about to get gored would not have me wanting to see the next scene. It made me yell at my screen, surprising my husband – no, climb up the tree! Quickly! LOL There’s one analogy I won’t soon forget. I plan to keep it in mind while writing from this moment forward. Thanks!
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i’ve found whenever a chapter doesn’t work for me, especially in the ‘sagging’ middle, it’s because i don’t have the chapter endings right. It affects your pacing and without good pacing you lose the reader.
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Great post! I’m dealing with this now and this is very helpful.
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Yes, and if there is not acculumative tension then a cliff hanger feels like a gimmick and doesn’t always make me keep reading. If there is great tension on every page it doesn’t matter if a chapter ends in the middle of dialogue. For me.
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Lots to think about as I revise. Thank you!
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Accumulated tension…! That’s the term I’ve been looking for. For the longest time, I haven’t really known what the heck to call it.
Bravo.
Thanks much.
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I read a book in its entirety last night because of its first chapter. There were many things to recommend it, but I might have set it down in a few places if not for one thing: Chapter 1 occurs in present-day and leaves us with a huge cliffhanger. Chapter 2 begins six months prior. It’s not until about three-quarters of the way through the book we learn the outcome to chapter 1.
In other words, I agree with you. Establish enough stakes or a big enough story question, and even the moments of peace will possess ominous undertones. Great post, Ray. Thanks.
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I completely agree with Laura.
Great post, Ray, and I too love the phrase “accumulated tension.” Thanks so much.
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