There and Not
Donald Maass on Aug 04 2010 | Filed under: CRAFT
Recently I was a guest in a movie star’s home in the Hollywood Hills. (Yeah I know, life as a literary agent is rough, isn’t it?) It was a many-acre fairy tale on some of the world’s most expensive real estate.
Secret paths led to private terraces. A party lawn seemed to host a ghost soiree in the moonlight. A painting studio had works in progress but no artist in evidence. It was like visiting the island of Phraxos in The Magus, the elusive master evident everywhere but nowhere in sight.
The movie star, you see, was not in residence.
All of which had me thinking about how character can be conjured without a character actually appearing (yet) on the page. Think of Rebecca in Daphne DuMaurier’s novel. Rebecca doesn’t appear at all but her presence looms powerfully throughout the story.
How do Fowles, DuMaurier and others conjure characters who haven’t walked on? There are two techniques: 1) physical evidence, 2) their impact on POV characters.
Is there a character in your current novel whose presence looms large, whose shadow is long, whose influence is far reaching, whose legacy is heavy or whose impact on your protagonist began in the past?
If so, why not try conjuring this character before they actually appear? Here are a few prompts to help…
- * What are five pieces of archaeological evidence of this character, such as personal possessions or places on which they’ve left their mark? Find a spot for your protagonist to encounter this evidence before that character actually appears.
- * Who besides your protagonist has also known this character? In what way did that relationship most change that third person, for good or ill? Find a spot for that third person to relate their feelings to your protagonist. (Think warnings.)
- * If your protagonist has known that character previously, what does he/she most treasure, fear or wonder about with respect to that character? Find a spot to relate those feelings.
- * If your protagonist has not known this character previously, what does he/she imagine this character will be like? Magnify that impression and find a spot to plant it.
Living characters can become more vivid by first making them ghosts. Dead characters can come alive through the artifacts or wreckage they leave behind.
Donald Maass is president of the Donald Maass Literary Agency in New York. His agency sells more than 150 novels every year to major publishers in the U.S. and overseas. He’s also the author of several craft books for writers, including the highly acclaimed Writing the Breakout Novel and The Fire in Fiction.
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Excellent prompts. I also think of a physical place having impact on story…such as Tara in Gone With The Wind.
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“Living characters can become more vivid by first making them ghosts. Dead characters can come alive through the artifacts or wreckage they leave behind.”
Love that!
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Excellent excellent excellent.
I didn’t realize it until after reading the post, but I’ve already been doing this… by accident/without really thinking about it. Perhaps I can increase the impact now by applying the above suggestions. Thanks!
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Wonderful post. I have a character like this and really appreciate these prompts. Thanks so much.
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Excellent points. I love watching this principle at work. Two TV examples spring to mind.
The first is Maris Crane (Niles’ wife) from Frasier. She is never actually seen, but her presence is very much felt by the characters’ reactions and comments about her.
The other example is Morn from Star Trek DS9. He is seen on many occasions but he never says a word, even though characters often mention his extreme talkativeness.
It’s definitely a method worth mastering.
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Excellent articel. Thank you! As previously said, this made a tremendous impact on me.
“Living characters can become more vivid by first making them ghosts. Dead characters can come alive through the artifacts or wreckage they leave behind.”
I have just such a character, and I look forward to putting this to use.
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And we shouldn’t forget The Stig! ;-D
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This is by coincidence exactly what I’m working on today! Thanks for a fantastic–and timely!–post!
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I like this. The absentee character is defined by the other characters’ interactions or thoughts or experiences. They almost have to be larger than life, because the reader has to rely on others’ perceptions in order to get to know the absentee character.
Thanks for sharing your insights. I always come away with so much great info!
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Great post! I do have a “not there” character in my novel. She makes no physical appearance, but the main character sometimes thinks about or refers to her, so she appears indirectly in this way. I love that you talked about this.
And I also loved the glimpse of that Hollywood Hills home!
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I’m currently working on a short story and trying to foreshadow the creatures before they show up, so this is right in time. I did much the same in my latest WIP where I presented several characters’ views on the hero’s mother, and then brought on the hero’s mother. That was fun.
Marc Vun Kannon
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This also gives you another way to get the reader to contribute to the worldview of your work. Just as you don’t over-describe something so your reader can contribute with his imagination, it works with a character as you’ve pointed out.
Even a “dead man’s hand” can have an influence; let the reader contribute.
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Excellent advice! I’m going to employ it whenever I rewrite my last MS, in which I had one of these characters but couldn’t quite figure out how to make her loom large enough. The way the other characters react can reveal more about the character, their own psyches, and the dynamics of the story than one would expect, and when it comes to making the character him/herself seem otherworldly or daunting or powerful, less direct action is often more.
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Perfect timing, as I’m currently working with an amazing independent editor on this very issue. How to let readers feel the presence of my antagonist, when she doesn’t physically enter the novel until much later. Your prompts gave me some ideas…things are brewing…
Thank you!
Catherine
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Perfect for me since my story takes place right after burying her mother. Really great insight as usual Don. Thanks!
Rachel
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Oops, since the story takes place after the protagonist buries her mother… I’m sure you were holding your breath for this correction. I know I was. :P
R
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Cool post – what an interesting suggestion. Maybe I’ll try it as a short story?
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reminds me of Lord Voldemort in the HP books- he wasn’t exactly there yet but the sheer terror his name invoked can’t be beaten
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Thank you! This post is validation of something I’ve been doing and will make having to kill off a beloved character a little less painful for myself and my reader. I have one protagonist going through his room, another noticing a scent still on his clothes, etc.
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Hmmm…intriguing. My characters in the current WIP are very much there, but this gives me an idea for a novel I made some notes on. The main character has a very negative influence in his life, but I didn’t want do a lot of backstory. Now I know a good way to handle it. I should have thought of Rebecca; it’s one of my favorite books.
Thanks! :)
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Great tips! I have a “there but not” character in one of my WIPs, so this is exactly what I needed for improving things in the next draft. Thank you!
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