Giving My Characters Voice
Allison Winn Scotch on Jan 14 2010 | Filed under: CRAFT
If I were going to tell you one thing to do with your manuscript, it would be, when writing in first person as I do, to find your protagonist’s voice. Voice is king. Voice is, in my opinion, everything. As my fellow novelist friend, Laura Dave, once said to me, “Voice is the reason people pick up a book. They’ll forgive a lot of other things, but they won’t forgive a voice they don’t like.”
How do I find the voice for my books? Well, sometimes it’s easy and sometimes, it’s a lot less so. I do it the way that I imagine actors do with their own roles – I try to get inside the heads of my characters: how would they act in certain situations? How would they REACT in certain situations? What bothers them? Are they snarky, sad, contemplative, unwilling to tackle confrontation, too quick to tackle confrontation? I consider all of these things, and if I’m lucky, a voice comes to me quite easily. That’s what happened for my first two books. I considered the character from a variety of angles, and, well, I just knew how they’d sound. I think it’s important to make their voices as fully-fleshed out as a real person’s voice – and by that I mean inner-dialogue – would be. Donald Maass spoke earlier about being too wishy-washy and this is so true: your characters and their voices need to stand out. They need to resonate inside readers’ brains. They need to stick there, like taffy, because readers hear a part of themselves in your character, and bland, blah, boring voices just won’t do that.
How do I know? Weeeeelll, I ran into a bit of a problem with the heroine of my third book, The One That I Want, which isn’t yet out, so none of you have read it and you’ll have to trust me on this one. As in my other books, I tried to delve into Tilly, my protagonist; I tried to lean my ear close and hear what she was telling me, listen in and hear HOW she was telling me it…but…I just couldn’t. In retrospect, I suspect that I had a difficult time hearing her voice because she was just so different that I am: that resonating undercurrent wasn’t ever there – I struggled to understand her circumstances, her mindset, and how she found herself where she found herself in her life. (Again, in hindsight, it’s probably easier to write about characters whose choices you understand on some level. But I was in too deep with this book to back out when I realized this.) The plot was strong enough, the writing was sharp enough, but the voice just wasn’t there. I rewrote and rewrote the heck out of the book, but I still wasn’t happy with it.
It was only when my editor gave it a semi-final read and suggested that instead of making Tilly depressed over her circumstances that I make her angry, that Tilly’s voice kicked into gear. Suddenly, I had a character who wasn’t blah – like Maass said – but who was instead pissed-off, angry, ready to take her life and her husband and her father and her sisters, and shake them by the ankles and slap them silly! This brought out such a different voice from a character whose circumstances and plotline didn’t change. But her reaction to it did. She had fire! And THAT, I understood, and THAT, I was able to translate onto the page. By upping her emotional stakes, I completely altered her voice, and by altering her voice, I completely altered the book. Now, it’s up to readers – whether or not Tilly’s voice resonates with them – but I’m glad I kept digging, kept pressing my ear up and listening. She’s a full-fleshed out, as-real-life-as-can-be-in-fiction character, and that’s what voice is all about.
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What a great post, Allison! And I absolutely agree. Voice is essential, and it’s so hard to get it right when your POV character is a tough nut to crack. Looking forward to meeting Tilly and hearing her speak for herself! :-)
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You accomplished two things (for me) with this post.
1) I’m going to spend the rest of the day applying this advice to a specific character that’s been giving me trouble.
2) I really, really, REALLY can’t wait to read your book now (before it was just “really, really”).
Thanks!
.-= Lydia Sharp´s last blog ..Unheard Voices In Spec Fic: Brandi Guthrie =-.
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Hmm, you just gave me something to think about with my first novel’s voice. I need to make the MC’s voice stronger (and more masculine) and I think changing his perspective on what’s happening might be the way to do it. Thanks!
.-= Melanie´s last blog ..I’ve Been Busy! =-.
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Ditto Lydia, except make it 3 things.
3) I am in awe of your dedication and determination. I can only imagine how hard it is to stick with a book that’s frustrating you and not succeeding in certain ways that you want it to. Props for not giving up and for finding a way to make it work!
.-= Kristan´s last blog ..Letting myself be silly =-.
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Allison, This is why I consider you one of my writing mentors. This post couldn’t be more timely for me. I’m heading into Draft #3 of my YA novel, and that’s one of the things I think is lacking in the book. My mc is sweet and wants everyone to get along. She’s like a little Ghandi, which is wonderful, but as Don Maass (whose book, “Writing the Breakout Novel” I’m currently reading) says, it’s a little blah. I love her to death, but she’s a little “flat.”
Like Ghandi, I’m going to make her a force of nature.
Look out, 3rd draft – HERE I COME! ;-)
.-= Debra Schubert´s last blog ..Please Help the Beautiful People of Haiti =-.
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Great post.
I think the key to writing the voice of a character who is completely unlike you, is to find some trait, even if it is a minor one, which resounds with you. Just some little thing that lets you hook into that character and gives you some small insight. Whether that be anger or vindictiveness or selfishness or moral righteousness or whatever. One thing that you can understand or relate to and that helps you with the character’s motivation.
Happy I’ve discovered your site and plan to return often.
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Thanks you guys! I’m the first to admit that I’m nervous about this book, simply because it was so difficult for me to write, but I’m glad to hear that you guys are still dying to read it! :)
Debra – I posted this on my blog and forgot to include it here, but I think it’s helpful to think of your character’s voice like that of a friend: we all have nice, if not fairly vanilla, friends who we likely wouldn’t want to listen to for 300 pages. It’s not that nice isn’t fantastic, it’s that it’s not enough to keep the reader along for the journey for 300 pages.
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I love this post, as I told Allison yesterday. It’s such a great illustration of how changing a character not only affects the readers’ journey but impacts how we as writers feel about going to work every day on a story. Because, yeah, who wants to construct an entire book around Vanilla when there’s Chocolate Fudge Ripple w/ Toffee Chunks?
Thanks, A!
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Allison, good post. Your observations are on the money. I wrote my second novel, a hard-boiled detective mystery, in first person. I definitely had a voice, but at one point it went away from me. I had to put the MS aside for three years until it came back.
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Thanks once for the good advice that, once again, kicks me in the pants. I need it!
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I think working on my character’s voices is something I need to work at – to make sure they have their own unique voice so they don’t all sound the same…
.-= Shelley´s last blog ..Speed Bump =-.
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Fascinating post, Allison. Anger is truly a common denominator and, no matter what our circumstances, we can all relate to that. You earned your dues on this book and I’m sure it will be appreciated.
.-= larramiefg´s last blog ..Practical Advice from Our Authors =-.
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Great advice as always from one of my favorite authors. Thanks, Allison!
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It’s a fabulous post. Thank you for sharing your experience. Finding voice is still a concept I am working with. In some stories it’s definitely there. In others it’s not. And learning how to find it is quite an elusive process.
.-= Dolly´s last blog ..Outline Angst =-.
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There’s also the concept of volume. Fear is an emotion; at low volume, it’s little twitches and nervousness. At very high volume it’s blind panic. Look at raising or lowering volume to make a change.
Some emotional levels are more “active” than others. Depression/apathy is almost motionless. Anger is actually a higher, better level to be at than apathy; high-volume anger could be rage.
Move your character up or down and vary the volume. A good character arc might involve the character starting pretty low on emotion (perhaps boredom), both tone and volume and end up higher (strong interest) at the end of the story.
Have your character move up/down in both tone and volume throughout the story; this happens in real life. If your story is “tragic”, he’ll end up lower in emotional level. If it’s “happy” he’ll end up higher. A “no-change” starting and ending point is un-determined: he starts out mildly-interested and ends up the same.
.-= Bruce H. Johnson´s last blog ..Tech Writer to Fiction Writer 7: The Plot Thickens =-.
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Great post, Allison. More than just giving tips on finding your character’s voice, it gives us a great lesson on upping the ante emotionally. Someone once wrote — I think it was Stephen King — that you should be hard on your characters, don’t let them be comfortable, and your post reminded me of that.
Also, I’m totally with Therese: Chocolate Fudge Ripple with Toffee Chunks sounds waaaaaaaay better than vanilla. :)
Thanks
.-= Samantha Clark´s last blog ..Commit to writing =-.
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Grea post, Allison. The book I’m writing is told in first-person – my first shot at first person – and everything you say is so true. I also have found it easier to find my character’s voice when in the first person. I’m in so deep that I can inhabit that character. And I’m with Samantha and Uncle Stevie. Smack your characters around, make their lives miserable. It makes things way more interesting.
.-= Jay Eckert´s last blog ..This blog has relocated to… here? =-.
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