Comments on: Make Your Manuscript Less Bathetic http://writerunboxed.com/2008/05/13/make-your-manuscript-less-bathetic/ about the craft and business of genre fiction Wed, 17 Mar 2010 02:06:00 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 By: Therese Walsh http://writerunboxed.com/2008/05/13/make-your-manuscript-less-bathetic/comment-page-1/#comment-72211 Therese Walsh Mon, 19 May 2008 12:34:40 +0000 http://writerunboxed.com/2008/05/13/make-your-manuscript-less-bathetic/#comment-72211 Welcome, Marian! I think 9 out of 10 good critiques are about authenticity on one level or another. So important. Welcome, Marian! I think 9 out of 10 good critiques are about authenticity on one level or another. So important.

]]> By: Marian http://writerunboxed.com/2008/05/13/make-your-manuscript-less-bathetic/comment-page-1/#comment-72126 Marian Sat, 17 May 2008 14:50:49 +0000 http://writerunboxed.com/2008/05/13/make-your-manuscript-less-bathetic/#comment-72126 Very good article. I've flagged your blog for further reading. My critiquer Jordan has a nice way of indicating when my antagonists have my hero at their mercy and yet leave him alive instead of killing him. If I write, "They wrenched his arms behind his back and one of them hit him in the stomach. The others laughed", Jordan rewrites it in his critique like this : "They wrenched his arms behind his back and one of them hit him in the stomach *with a dagger*. The others laughed *as they cut his throat*." Really brings the point home to me. Very good article. I’ve flagged your blog for further reading.

My critiquer Jordan has a nice way of indicating when my antagonists have my hero at their mercy and yet leave him alive instead of killing him. If I write, “They wrenched his arms behind his back and one of them hit him in the stomach. The others laughed”, Jordan rewrites it in his critique like this :

“They wrenched his arms behind his back and one of them hit him in the stomach *with a dagger*. The others laughed *as they cut his throat*.”

Really brings the point home to me.

]]> By: Therese Walsh http://writerunboxed.com/2008/05/13/make-your-manuscript-less-bathetic/comment-page-1/#comment-71707 Therese Walsh Wed, 14 May 2008 13:08:21 +0000 http://writerunboxed.com/2008/05/13/make-your-manuscript-less-bathetic/#comment-71707 Thanks, Kath and DarcKnyt! RUE is a great one, Karin. (And Allison definitely knows what she's talking about.) Thanks, Kath and DarcKnyt!

RUE is a great one, Karin. (And Allison definitely knows what she’s talking about.)

]]> By: Karin Tabke http://writerunboxed.com/2008/05/13/make-your-manuscript-less-bathetic/comment-page-1/#comment-71633 Karin Tabke Tue, 13 May 2008 23:37:40 +0000 http://writerunboxed.com/2008/05/13/make-your-manuscript-less-bathetic/#comment-71633 My friend Allison Brennan drilled, "Refuse the urge to explian," mantra into my soul. My friend Allison Brennan drilled, “Refuse the urge to explian,” mantra into my soul.

]]> By: DarcKnyt http://writerunboxed.com/2008/05/13/make-your-manuscript-less-bathetic/comment-page-1/#comment-71576 DarcKnyt Tue, 13 May 2008 15:25:01 +0000 http://writerunboxed.com/2008/05/13/make-your-manuscript-less-bathetic/#comment-71576 Wow! You got person input from a rejecting agent! Despite the rejection part, that's pretty impressive! Your work must be amazing. Good luck with the "dream"! Wow! You got person input from a rejecting agent! Despite the rejection part, that’s pretty impressive! Your work must be amazing.

Good luck with the “dream”!

]]> By: Kathleen Bolton http://writerunboxed.com/2008/05/13/make-your-manuscript-less-bathetic/comment-page-1/#comment-71567 Kathleen Bolton Tue, 13 May 2008 14:02:24 +0000 http://writerunboxed.com/2008/05/13/make-your-manuscript-less-bathetic/#comment-71567 It's rare to get such detailed feedback from a publishing professional. Rarer still to be open to such feedback and employ it usefully. Awesome post, Therese. It’s rare to get such detailed feedback from a publishing professional. Rarer still to be open to such feedback and employ it usefully.

Awesome post, Therese.

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